this room is small
like my world is now small
caged inside a wall
that separates us all
wishing we could touch hands
life feels like porridge these days
but not the creamy exciting kind
the kind that tastes like walls.
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Excellent. This is a good example of a poem that works in all lower case. I’ve removed all your punctuation, because it doesn’t need it. And put a break in as well.
Thinking about it some more, with my editors hat on. You could add a new line after the second line, that echoes the first two lines. Then a break. And you’d have a very neat poem of three x three line verses.
thanks ill try editing it about