The sun shining down
At 20 degrees
The barbecue is lit
Watching out for the bees
Sun glasses on
Hats too
The birds are singing
Flowers blossoming
All on this Sunday!
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The sun shining down
At 20 degrees
The barbecue is lit
Watching out for the bees
Sun glasses on
Hats too
The birds are singing
Flowers blossoming
All on this Sunday!
I’ve taken out all your commas. What do you think? With poems you can choose how to use punctuation. As the end of a line signifies a break I tend to not use punctuation. I only use it if it’s needed to make something clearer.
OK I think it looks better