1..2..3..4..

by Elisha aged 10

Animal Competition Winner

1..2..3..4.. hear the mighty lion roar,
5..6..7..8.. hear that little rattling snake,
9..10..11..12.. see that little sneaky wolf,
13..14..15..16.. aahhh, that hyena’s being mean.

So that’s the story of the animals
I hope you liked it because
here come a stampede of elephants
aaaaAAAHHHHHHHHH.

20 Responses to “1..2..3..4..”

    • jacquelin' l

      I LOVE this poem I , was rapping it out with my friend Grace! I was the rapper and Grace was the singer!

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  • abigail bower

    Hi sis this is abbie just want to say your poem is good and you’re the best sister in the world.

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  • Sabrina Miles

    Hi it is Sabrina from school when Mrs stone told us you had won the poetry zone competition I went on the poetry zone website and read it and it was fantastic well done it was a great poem Sabrina xx.

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  • Roger Stevens

    Excellent poem. Very clever and very funny, as I told your local paper this morning!

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  • Isabelle

    Hi Elisha that poem is funny and cool!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! It helps my brother Jake do his maths only started school

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  • isabelle furnelll

    That is a really good poem Elisha it helps my brother Jake do his maths only started school and it’s a
    brilliant poem i love it and it’s funny
    ll

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  • Kieron Gray

    wow great poem elisha really like you probably will become a poet when ur older and what a kind comment from abi

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  • Muhsanah

    This is a really god poem :)
    I nearly have it memorised!
    1..2..3..4.. hear the mighty lion roar,
    5..6..7..8.. hear that little rattling snake,
    9..10..11..12.. see that little sneaky wolf,
    13..14..15..16.. aaaaahhhhh, that hyena’s being mean.

    Reply
  • Roger Stevens

    I think the rhyming is fine. The last verse doesn’t have to rhyme – because it’s a surprise. Line three – twelve and wolf – isn’t a perfect rhyme but it’s close. The consonants rhyme (the w sound). I’d rather have a close rhyme that makes sense than a perfect rhyme that’s not quite right. It’s a good poem.

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